Anyone who has written an email that has been misunderstood, let alone an MBA application essay, is no doubt aware of the subtleties of language and the simple nuances that can change a message’s meaning. Indeed, you can enliven a simple sentence by simply choosing a more active verb.
For example, consider the verb “earn.” By using “earn” rather than a more passive verb in the examples below, we can alter the meaning and impact of each sentence. Suddenly, you are in control—suddenly you worked hard and, as a result, accomplished great things.
Bad: “I received my PhD in Nuclear Physics from the University of So-and-So.”
Good: “I earned my PhD in Nuclear Physics from the University of So-and-So.”
Bad: “I was promoted from junior to senior analyst.” (Also bad because of passive voice.)
Good: “I earned a promotion from junior to senior analyst.”
Bad: “As a result of obtaining my MBA, I will be able to….”
Good: “As a result of earning my MBA, I will be able to….”
Once you have finished your essays, review them and check to see how often you can replace certain words with the verb “earn” or a similar verb that denotes action on your part.
